“This is going to be a killer
night.”
Kyle Bennett gave the room one
last inspection. Candles flickered on the tables, the mantle.
Flowers—roses that cost him a minor fortune—filled a vase. Music
he'd pulled out of Lauren's stash played through the speakers. Steaks
marinated in the fridge alongside the champagne and strawberries.
The small jeweler's box was
stuffed in his pants pocket.
He'd pulled out every chick
cliché he thought might make Lauren happy. He wanted this to be a
Valentine's Day to remember. One she could tell her girlfriends about
when she showed off the rock on her finger.
He moved to his bedroom and made
sure the gym socks were in the hamper and the lid was down in the
john.
Awesome sex was definitely in
order tonight, too.
He was looking for clean sheets
when the doorbell rang.
Damn. He glanced at his watch.
What a time for Lauren to decide to be not just on time, but fifteen
minutes early.
He gave the bed another assessing
look. The sheets were pretty clean.
There was always the sofa.
The shower.
Location didn't matter.
Wearing his best smile, he
crossed the living room and opened the door.
His smile faded. “What are you
doing here?”
Then he noticed the pistol.
It was the last thing he ever
noticed.
Don’t forget to come back for Part 2 of Her Fatal Valentine on Wednesday, February 6.
12 comments:
Great job, Cathy. Draws you right into the story and make you think: What's going to happen next?
Oh what a punch of an opening :). I'm hooked already! This is a brilliant idea, and you've got a posse of superb authors to carry it through!
I think the butler did it. What do you mean, there's no butler? :P
I haven't seen any of the other segments and can't wait to see what the other do with the story!
Oh, I can't wait to read the next one! :D
A great beginning, Cathy. Now I'm off to post the news on Facebook and Twitter.
Great opening and I love the title.
I have to wait until Wednesday? Not fair. This is fun.
Clare - just because no butler has been mentioned so far doesn't mean it wasn't the butler whodunnit. Maybe the mysterious caller is a disgruntled former employee - a butler who was dismissed for some reason?
Great start, Cathy! Nothing like a terrific hook to suck us in.
:)
Good stuff, Cathy! Way to set the mood and tone! :)
I'm totally hooked already. Great job, Cathy. Can't wait to read the next instalment!
Love the hook!
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